tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2967522649851339919.post1289031267039324109..comments2023-07-04T03:20:09.860-07:00Comments on William's Corner: Fimbulwinter Typo ThreadE. William Brownhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10474901849783297203noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2967522649851339919.post-68397167555128315022017-06-23T02:35:06.642-07:002017-06-23T02:35:06.642-07:00Couldn't find Black Coven thread so posting he...Couldn't find Black Coven thread so posting here:<br />in Chapter 25:"I wasn’t sure how many troops Hecate had available for this attack, but if the mythology was accurate every warrior who didn’t die in battle was hers.". Shouldn't be Hel instead of Hecate here?<br />Vikartihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14781078321761202786noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2967522649851339919.post-31250130783089589882015-04-11T20:18:25.914-07:002015-04-11T20:18:25.914-07:00“Oh. Guess we didn’t fool you as much as I though,...“Oh. Guess we didn’t fool you as much as I though,<br /><br />thought*Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2967522649851339919.post-59094155332309630772015-04-04T20:43:42.291-07:002015-04-04T20:43:42.291-07:00When are you going to write something?When are you going to write something?wardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04914877806944544851noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2967522649851339919.post-52089137532723314322015-04-03T09:00:39.107-07:002015-04-03T09:00:39.107-07:00“Yes, lord wizard,” she said nervously. “Worked th...“Yes, lord wizard,” she said nervously. “Worked there for six years, until the steward got it in his head I was the one stealing the silverware.”<br /><br />The text is indented twice.PatrickSJhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06110855177368037167noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2967522649851339919.post-89801699555940553822015-04-03T07:50:10.954-07:002015-04-03T07:50:10.954-07:00Chapter 9
One of the refuge girls
refuge => ref...Chapter 9<br />One of the refuge girls<br />refuge => refugee<br /><br />Also, sometimes I see Margold, sometimes Marigold. Margold appears more often than Marigold.PatrickSJhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06110855177368037167noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2967522649851339919.post-42693115762217261232015-04-01T19:59:59.099-07:002015-04-01T19:59:59.099-07:00Chapter 8
“She’s a teenage girl who’s willing to ...Chapter 8<br /><br />“She’s a teenage girl who’s willing to risking her life to protect innocent civilians from monsters. Isn’t that what matters now?”<br /><br />willing to risking => willing to riskPatrickSJhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06110855177368037167noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2967522649851339919.post-26722603656317160512015-03-24T17:28:57.536-07:002015-03-24T17:28:57.536-07:00Chapter 9:
"...how much the moon of the room ...Chapter 9:<br />"...how much the moon of the room lifted..." -> moodYouSeeMeToohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04669808926851277407noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2967522649851339919.post-81990002530827157432015-03-21T16:33:45.371-07:002015-03-21T16:33:45.371-07:00Chapter 15:
"My athame's can barely scra...Chapter 15: <br />"My athame's can barely scratch them" -> athamesElyandarinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08289813912842329057noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2967522649851339919.post-54436108324454105042015-03-21T16:02:39.142-07:002015-03-21T16:02:39.142-07:00Chapter 14:
"Lighting seared my back" -&...Chapter 14:<br />"Lighting seared my back" -> LightningElyandarinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08289813912842329057noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2967522649851339919.post-57279916182440621172015-03-21T15:59:49.219-07:002015-03-21T15:59:49.219-07:00Grammar-wise, there are a couple of places with ne...Grammar-wise, there are a couple of places with new paragraphs inside quotes, like: <br />"[...]As you can see, your golem and your blade has already failed."<br />"Of course, that's assuming that your own apprentice doesn't kill you first.[...]" <br /><br />It's the same character speaking, but it looks like a new one just entered the discussion. It would read better as: <br />"[...]As you can see, your golem and your blade has already failed." <br />Holger paused. "Of course, that's assuming that your own apprentice doesn't kill you first.[...]" <br /><br />Alternately, consensus grammar for new paragraphs in quoted text seems to be: <br />"[...]As you can see, your golem and your blade has already failed. <br />"Of course, that's assuming that your own apprentice doesn't kill you first.[...]" <br /><br />That is, skipping the closing quotation marks until the last paragraph. <br />Elyandarinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08289813912842329057noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2967522649851339919.post-66683502066827866812015-03-21T15:25:21.089-07:002015-03-21T15:25:21.089-07:00Chapter 14:
"I can work bit" -> work ...Chapter 14:<br />"I can work bit" -> work a bitElyandarinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08289813912842329057noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2967522649851339919.post-4595450778302915802015-03-20T17:55:03.315-07:002015-03-20T17:55:03.315-07:00Chapter 12:
"any other commoner I'd seed&...Chapter 12:<br />"any other commoner I'd seed" -> seenElyandarinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08289813912842329057noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2967522649851339919.post-76276015479735228692015-03-16T20:28:43.186-07:002015-03-16T20:28:43.186-07:00This comment has been removed by the author.hysbyrdhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14864811181173280031noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2967522649851339919.post-16532173353376995932015-03-16T20:28:00.286-07:002015-03-16T20:28:00.286-07:00When is Black Coven looking to come out?When is Black Coven looking to come out?hysbyrdhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14864811181173280031noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2967522649851339919.post-35259603956397722212015-03-12T16:29:52.093-07:002015-03-12T16:29:52.093-07:00Chapter 15: "limped back over to." ->...Chapter 15: "limped back over to." -> "limped back over to me."Elyandarinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08289813912842329057noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2967522649851339919.post-25949007596008811812015-03-07T08:02:24.299-08:002015-03-07T08:02:24.299-08:00"mix of swords, axes and what I was pretty su..."mix of swords, axes and what I was pretty sure were compound bows"<br /><br />I suspect you meant "composite bows" here unless you really did intend for them to have modern style bows with cables and pulleys.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08083295954683424915noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2967522649851339919.post-19302057078840471542015-03-07T05:32:42.963-08:002015-03-07T05:32:42.963-08:00Marcus != MarkusMarcus != MarkusJoe Schellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09980937695831119290noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2967522649851339919.post-55935776839781379472015-03-07T03:13:54.650-08:002015-03-07T03:13:54.650-08:00Chapter 3
always popping out of the woods to plin...Chapter 3<br /><br />always popping out of the woods to plink a few arrows and curses at whoever they can get a beat on and running off into the woods.<br /><br />beat => bead<br /><br />and running off into the woods => and running off back into the woods again [*]<br /><br />________________<br /><br />* = okay, technically the sentence is correct as is best i can tell. It just 'feels' like the altered version is how it _should_ read. On the other tentacle English isn't my native language so i might very well be dead wrong. <br /> Grimmelhausenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00629289185884708740noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2967522649851339919.post-3550845709346740192015-03-07T01:54:51.752-08:002015-03-07T01:54:51.752-08:00Chapter 2
but there is a big different between a ...Chapter 2<br /><br />but there is a big different between a couple of bored gang members looking for someone to beat up<br /><br />different => differenceGrimmelhausenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00629289185884708740noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2967522649851339919.post-91745340128084663332015-03-05T10:17:30.925-08:002015-03-05T10:17:30.925-08:00Chapter 3
a peasant farmer who’d come down with th...Chapter 3<br />a peasant farmer who’d come down with the flue,<br />flue => flu<br /><br />Chapter 11<br />the broken stone beneath our feat<br />feat => feet<br /><br />“I’ll check,” said the main who’d been giving orders.<br />main => man<br /><br />Chapter 13+<br />Oscar => Oskar (several locations) (22 Oskars, 10 Oscar)<br />where Oscar’s smithy was located<br />set off for Oscar’s smithy<br />Oscar, Hroldir and Gronir listened<br />Oscar said heavily<br />that, but Oscar and Gronir<br />So what do we do?” Oscar asked<br />“Are you still going to rescue Cerise?” Oscar asked.<br />go through Oscar’s men like a hot knife<br />Oscar shrugged<br />“You sure you don’t want a few of the boys to come with you?” Oscar asked.<br /><br />alter => altar (several locations)<br />Behind the alter,<br />At the statue’s feet stood an alter<br />There was a door behind the alter<br />spot not far from the alter<br /><br />Ty to plan out an inconspicuous route to the granary,<br />Ty => Try<br /><br />mater and energy are different forms<br />mater => matterPatrickSJhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06110855177368037167noreply@blogger.com